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Wednesday, April 22, 2009

ToTaLLy TabOo. Part - 1

Totally Taboo. A short story I wrote, in 7 parts. Something I'd like to share. Your opinions mean everything to me, and I hope you'll oblige, by reading...I'm trying to make it in short pieces, so it's easier to read through quickly.



PREKSHA :

Preksha wondered how she let it happen. It was so not like her, in fact, it was one of the things she held in severe contempt. Extramarital affairs of course. It just felt good.

To be treated like a queen. To be wined and dined like a lady. To be thought of as someone to be "won" over as opposed to a doormat, or a tail.
She had become quieter in her marriage of 2 years. 4 years if you counted courtship. People said love marriages didn't work out and she was starting to believe these people. Whoever they were.

She gave her hair one last brush, checked her reflection in the mirror next to the door, put on her thousand buck shoes and stepped out into the sunshine. She had a movie date. Nimish was waiting for her at the multiplex and had already bought the tickets, Preksha was nearly late.

Nimish liked to take her on dates, even though they were both in their early thirties. They behaved like two teenagers as they greeted each other with hugs and squeezes. The minute the theatre lights were dimmed, Nimish gently took hold of her hand. leaned close to her ear and whispered, " You look beautiful. I really missed you."
Preksha smiled to herself. Noticing how she looked, was just one of the things keeping her with Nimish. That and the fact that he missed her. With Rajat she wondered if he would even realise she was gone.

From their house, from his life, from their almirah, from their bed.
The bed.

She had left that a long time ago. He was just too busy to notice. To realise that she was purposely asleep before he got into bed...or else she was feigning sleep. If nothing else, she would linger too long in the bathroom, waiting till she could hear his even, steady, deep breaths indicating he was asleep. Sex, if it every chanced to occur, was perfunctionary. No longer was it the prolonged lovemaking of their courtship, where they couldn't wait for a chance to be alone, they couldn't get their hands off each other. A thigh, a breast, an arm, a cheek, a shoulder...as long as one part of their body was touching one part of the other's, their hunger was temporarily sated. Till they reached their bedroom and would ravish each other in earnest, unabashed, not ashamed of their fierce hunger.


No more.

Nimish always bought her flowers. It could be a single red rose, or five carnations, or a beautiful bunch of dahlias, or a boquet of lilies. They met just once a week. Twice if lucky. She seemed to live for these days and yet they left her feeling guilty and wistful. Why had Rajat changed? When had he stopped seeing her as a woman with needs, with desires and with hunger? Why was she out with someone else? Who was this man holding her hands like they were flowers? Why was she laughing at this movie with this man? why was she letting this man touch her?

Which was the greater wrong? Nimish touching her body? Nimish touching her heart? Preksha enjoying his touch? Wanting it as much as she needed to breathe?Either way. she wanted him. He had brought her back to life. Literally. But that was another story.

Another day.



24 lost souls found themselves in my mirror....:

Little Girl Lost said...

coffee... this took my breath away early in the morning...
and one of your lines is something i've wondered about for a long long time,...
'Which was the greater wrong? Nimish touching her body? Nimish touching her heart'

i often wonder which is a more serious form of cheating- if you have sex with a guy outside your relationship, or if you fall in love with him...
maybe i'll write a psot on this.

you brought out preksha's dilemma beautifully.
ok, now i'm off to read the next part :)

coffeeismypoison said...

THank u LGL!!!! u made my morning!
hope u enjoy the next parts as well...after a break...

coffeeismypoison said...

Wats a PSOT?

Crafty Shines said...

hey! sory girl, for the delay to get here! i've come when both parts were published....but good for me...coz i loved it!!

u made a very good narration in this first part, the end was nice, thank god for me i have the second part published already to read!!! :D

great goin!!!

Little Girl Lost said...

:D i meant post.
that'll teach me to preview...

coffeeismypoison said...

@Crafty shines : Ur not late...they were both done last night! Thanks for visiting and for such lovely comments! I was afraid this was boring!

Sumit said...

Nice story. Asking some valid questions as I see it. the wrong doesn't lie in her wanting it, the wrong perhaps lies in her giving in to it, and the chap being an absolute cave man!!
either ways, she had to break... or was she too weak??

coffeeismypoison said...

@Sumit : Hes not a caveman and shes not weak. U need to re-read. Perhaps with understanding yes?
Isn't wanting nearly equal to giving in. Eventually ppl who want too much give in.
Wanting, even just wanting, means straying.

Ruchika said...
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Chronicwriter said...

i getting a grip now... and why is the girl in the picture licking the guy's nose?

www.chronicwriter.com

Pretty Me!! said...

been really busy to visit any blog offlate .. and same going to be so till june :(

neway .. coming to this story :


Which was the greater wrong? Nimish touching her body? Nimish touching her heart? Preksha enjoying his touch? Wanting it as much as she needed to breathe?


these were really well thought lines !! at times i realized that you can not stop some one touching your heart !! thats where you lose !!

coffeeismypoison said...

@Chronicwriter : They're about to make lovvve Chronicwriter...I think shes kissing him...maybe she was hungry and in a fit of passion decided to chomp on his nose :)

@Pretty ME : Glad u liked it :)am so please u took the time out to comment despite ur busy schedule!!appreciate it!

sawan said...

pretty nice :) lemme hurry to the next part :)

coffeeismypoison said...

hurry Sawan!

Priya said...

You're a great story writer..you know how to weave words!

coffeeismypoison said...

@priya : Thanks priya :o) pls do keep reading and giving me ur feedback...i appreciate it a lot.

Aniket said...

Whoaa Lobster-gurl!! The temperature just went up a few notches after reading the post.

Wasn't expecting such a bold story. :-)

You have laid the foundation well. Great narration. Now I move on to the next part.

PS: I think instead of "To be wined and dined like a lady" it should be "to wine and dine like a lady" but then again I might be wrong. :D

coffeeismypoison said...

@Aniket : HEy!! ur not wrong...but i dont think i am either...see...its all in the tense...in this case. For instance, I like to wine and dine like a lady...this implies i can wine n dine with OR WITHOUT someone else...independently.
But P wanted to BE wined and Dined...meaning she needed someone else to wine and dine and probably pick up the tab [its her hubby so its ok :) ]...
did u get it? was I clear? Did that make any sense...?if not tell me...

Aniket said...

Hmm... you if you put it that way it makes sense too. May be you just ignited my wilder side... cause 'To BE wined and dined...' made me feels she was being eaten up. Though she would love that am sure. lolzzz

We should seriously leave correcting each other business. I am more Chandler-like than Ross. :D

Zeba Talkhani said...

A very wrong time to read your blog. My exams are from tomorrow and I now want to read all the parts. But it will have to wait. I am done with the first. And I love it. Will keep you updared as I read through them all. I love the topic that you chose to write on. I have been thinking of writing a short story on my blog as well. But it will all have to wait till my exams. Wish me luck! :-)

CoFfEe AnGeL said...

@Zeba : Haha...i know how u feel...am perversely glad to find my story so enticing [kidding.]! But do focus on ur exams :o) my storys not goin anywhere :D and do comment on ALL the parts!!!! not just at the start and end.

Mani Lalwani said...

voila!! bingo! bang on target....
was just surfing around yesterday night! And This is where I landed up.seems a nice read till now...
A firm grip over the story!
Presksha's character is well weaved.
Must be fun to read ahead. Will sure complete the series tonight.
Take care :)

CoFfEe AnGeL said...

Hey Mani, hope u liked the rest of the story then :-) welcome to the blog!!

CoFfEe AnGeL said...

Hey Mani, hope u liked the rest of the story then :-) welcome to the blog!!